Discovering Colza

Hi everyone! Here is a little story again... Remember, few months ago I posted this: edahel.deviantart.com/art/Peal…
THIS IS NOT TRUE ANYMORE! I changed few things:

Colza was a loner, but fell in love with Ace, a house cat. His towlegs decided to adopt the little she-cat, who quickly became pregnant. Ace heard his towlegs speaking of the kittens... They wanted to give them as soon as possible, so Colza fled, despite Ace's warnings. She found a shelter between a big tree's roots, and finally gave birth to two little kittens. The first one is a male called Ermine, and the second one is a female named Crocus. After two weeks, Colza couldn't find preys anymore, because weather was getting colder and her kittens couldn't wait too long without freezing. She ran out of milk, and her children were slolwy diying because of the lack of food.

But a big brown cat entered the shelter, and gently talked to Colza to make her leave the roots with her spawn. Then she arrived in front of a whole patrol: the big male called OakFang, another tom named PointyThorn, a beautiful she-cat named BroomFlower, and a young female called MousePaw. OakFang chose to help the young mother and took her and the kittens to his Clan, MoonClan. Her mate, FrostFlower, who had also a litter about a moon ago, took care of Ermine and Crocus, saving their lives.


How is it? I'm pretty proud, I find this version better than the first one. Also, I'm very proud of my drawing! (It's so rare!!)